Ashes to Ashes Dust to Dust Funny
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Source: https://allpoetry.com/poem/14737649-Ashes-to-Ashes--Dust-to-Dust--by-Ken-doll
Vibrant Oddities - Beautiful lines and poetic form within these lovely gates you deepen here. The imagery welcomes the reader a gentle caress. Wonderfully written, kind poet. Thank you for your time.
on May 07 2022 05:43 AM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Ken doll - Thank you for your time kind poet
on May 07 2022 06:29 AM PST x edit
Miss Negativity - Fantastic write. Usually it's hard to manage an interesting piece in such few lines, but you absolutely nailed it. ,,I just wanna see that smile when she dances - So rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes" These are my favorite lines. Beautiful
on May 07 2022 04:37 AM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Ken doll - Thank you for reading and taking time to comment
on May 07 2022 06:30 AM PST x edit
spideracer - You have some great thoughts and lines in this well written poem with strong imagery to capture the emotions well. Thanks for sharing Kendal.
on May 06 2022 09:18 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Silpika Kalita - Profound and splendid. The notes in the AN is truly captivating
on May 06 2022 09:14 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Himanshu singla - Very emotional and beautifully flowing piece.Thank you for sharing
on May 06 2022 08:23 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Bluewrite76 - Very nice. A calm piece of work. I love the emotions blended into it subtly. Repeated reads yield more thoughts .
Lovely post
on May 06 2022 08:09 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
K. R. Wonder - Wow, powerful imagery and diction. Really well written with vivid pictures, I especially liked the "so rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes." Thanks for sharing!
on May 06 2022 08:02 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Just Poppy - great wordplay in this poem, enjoyed it.
on May 06 2022 05:24 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Ken doll - Thank you kindly
on May 06 2022 05:48 PM PST x edit
avery1421 - an interesting write. well done.
Great write
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on May 06 2022 05:10 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Ed ostrom - Powefully penne a true delight to read. Tha I you for sharing.
Blessings
Ed
on May 06 2022 05:06 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Blll - Powerful writing, "when sound grinding my bones never quit".
on May 06 2022 03:49 PM PST x rate: , , skip edit
Ken doll - Thank you for reading and commenting
on Apr 01 2022 04:53 PM PST x edit
ecrivain01 -
You didn't read the contest directions. It says in plain ENglish, no brevity, 10 lines or less. Better luck next time.
on Apr 12 2021 11:30 PM PST x edit
- So rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes - this is a powerful and potent line echoing the sentiment of the entire poem. The colloquial language does not diminish the poem in any way.
Great post
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on Apr 09 2021 12:32 AM PST x edit
James George - "sounds grinding my bones"
"making change counting sand it never stop(s)"
There are pearls in the river.
Enjoyable
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on Mar 16 2021 06:43 AM PST x edit
Aren t.we.all. - "death can choke on victory" is such a powerful line, and the overall poem was very well written! Thanks for the entry!
on Mar 11 2021 11:43 AM PST x edit
Yukalitlee - This poem was enjoyable to read. I liked "I'm damned whenever I inspire my beast to grow". Thanks for sharing.
on Jan 25 2021 09:22 PM PST x edit
ixxehi - I was looking for a poem that introduces you to me. Great poem anyway.
on Dec 27 2020 07:13 AM PST x edit
Katydid55 - and this is you, my friend, your beauty is your kindness. Though you do not say it in your piece, it rings loud in your notes. Your beauty shines blindingly like the sun .... your kindness and grace. Absolutely lovely
on Nov 04 2020 11:53 AM PST x edit
Katydid55 - Thank you Ken for sharing. I love the imagery of embers lighting up remnants...such a vivid and poignant image to the prompt. Thank you!
on Nov 12 2020 02:38 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for kind inspiring words
on Nov 04 2020 12:09 PM PST x edit
brandon- - beautiful flow and imagery, thank u for this share
on Nov 02 2020 07:21 PM PST x edit
- Well, thank you for giving the opportunity to others, my friend! Your poem is certainly a wonderful one. I appreciate it!
Nicely written
on Nov 01 2020 08:01 AM PST x edit
- I thought of a phoenix with this one, destruction followed by creation. Vivid imagery, and a lovely write, I loved the way this made me feel :'D
on Sep 11 2020 09:39 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - It's funny you say Phoenix I've been told that before, I wasn't think that at all when a I wrote it, it just came out that way. Thank you for reading and commenting this is a personal favorite and it means a lot, I appreciate it with much love
on Sep 11 2020 12:37 PM PST x edit
- Ahaha, it happens at times
One of my "self-portrait" poems reminded someone of a leprechaun once :/
And it was a pleasure to read :')
on Sep 11 2020 01:10 PM PST x edit
Ken doll - Lol that's hilarious , I wrote a poem about our shop mechanic that's a short little Irish prick, turned into a leprechaun poem on accident LOL
on Sep 11 2020 01:29 PM PST x edit
- 😂😂people have a thing for leprechauns it appears
on Sep 11 2020 01:30 PM PST x edit
Ken doll - What yours called I wanna read it?
Mines
"nothing gold can stay"
on Sep 11 2020 01:31 PM PST x edit
- Me? I never posted it actually, because I was miffed about my friend mistaking me as a leprechaun
If I ever post it, you'll definitely be the first person I'll inform xD
Off to read yours now bye bye!
on Sep 11 2020 06:54 PM PST x edit
Sezica17 - Beautiful poem, I got so caught up in it and at the end I felt that it shouldn't end, amazing poem!
on Sep 11 2020 06:11 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for opportunity
on Sep 11 2020 06:41 AM PST x edit
LNF - This is beautiful...When sounds grinding my bones finally quit...my favorite...beautifully put!
Clever piece!
on Aug 12 2020 07:02 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for inspiring words
on Aug 12 2020 02:26 PM PST x edit
Captain B2 - Passionate, brilliant brevity. An economy of words containing a wealth of emotion,
"I just wanna see that smile when she dances
So rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes
Cause that's the kinda fuel it takes to set the world on fire
Embers lighting up the remnant"
So wonderfully written.
on Aug 11 2020 09:56 PM PST x edit
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Ken doll - Thank you for insightful inspiring comments
on Aug 11 2020 10:43 PM PST x edit
Waynejent - This is fabulous, very descriptive and filled with emotion and hope. Great job It shall return
Thank ya
on Aug 11 2020 09:55 PM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for commenting
on Aug 11 2020 10:45 PM PST x edit
Ikeh peter uche - this is a powerful brevity write. keep up the good work
on Aug 10 2020 06:21 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for commenting
on Aug 10 2020 07:31 AM PST x edit
Neutron-Bomb - 'I just wanna see that smile when she dances
So rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes
Cause that's the kinda fuel it takes to set the world on fire,' such passionate verbiage, ufffph, great brevity, the beginning of the poem hooks you in and the ending brings it home, I also like the concept of counting sand, as a metaphor for standing stationary in life; thank you for entering.
on Aug 07 2020 01:52 AM PST x edit
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Giuseppe Messina - Thank you very much for your good poem i like me a lot, appreciate
Clever work
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on Aug 05 2020 03:44 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for commenting
on Aug 05 2020 08:51 AM PST x edit
Kim436 - Thank for enter.
on Jul 26 2020 11:29 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for opportunity
on Jul 26 2020 11:30 AM PST x edit
Kat Alley - Oh man - this lives with the reader long after the words pass from sight Written with so much feeling and the last line is...eternal Congrats on the medal
Amazing
on Jul 26 2020 04:16 AM PST x edit
- This could go with the prompt, or also a track I really like of theirs called "Dancin' Wild". Very nice pen, and thank you for entering the contest!
Clever work
on Jul 26 2020 12:21 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for opportunity
on Jul 26 2020 01:22 AM PST x edit
- You are very welcome
on Jul 26 2020 06:01 AM PST x edit
- Cool!
on Jul 18 2020 10:23 AM PST x edit
Crystal H. - a fantastic write here . great job,Ken!
on Mar 23 2020 03:39 PM PST x edit
Sonia3902z - Kendal, death is final for the physical body but Heaven awaits for those who seek eternal life on a spiritual basis. ~ Sonia
on Mar 05 2020 06:37 AM PST x edit
Sonia3902z - Ken doll, you are welcome.
on Mar 05 2020 11:59 AM PST x edit
DesertumRosaNell - This is a beautiful write, I thought the beginning a lil dark at first but you balance it well with the remainder of verse.
Subtle and eccentric in feel yet powerful within definitions.
Beautifully executed.
Nell xx
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on Feb 18 2020 11:43 PM PST x edit
Lost Blue Boy - Really nice poem you got there, short simple and sweet. Keep up the good work my friend : )
on Feb 18 2020 03:21 PM PST x edit
BlueButterfly - Great poem about the phoenix. I enjoyed this very much.
Clever write
on Feb 12 2020 06:48 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you this is a favorite means a lot
on Feb 12 2020 07:17 AM PST x edit
jennareborn - Love "water rocks to the beat that the rain drops" - very nice.
on Feb 12 2020 01:42 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for reading
on Feb 12 2020 02:24 AM PST x edit
Jayzee015 - It's short, but has a great flow to it.
Liked it.
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on Jan 26 2020 07:29 PM PST x edit
a shacknofsky - Great imagery to deliver your message. Well done Ken
on Jan 26 2020 06:32 PM PST x edit
Pastordavidrn - The title alerts the reader to the metaphor, but its employment has a slow start. Then, just when it picks up forceful speed, it makes a jump to a non-obvious, seemingly unconnected but clearly more treasured theme. Another couple of transitional lines might have helped, but alas . . . the sacrifices we make to the poetic demands of brevity.
on Jan 26 2020 05:32 PM PST x edit
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Ken doll - Thank you for insightful comments
on Jan 26 2020 05:42 PM PST x edit
Reason - Ken doll, I liked your theme of embers, fuel, ashes, dust, you carried it through fairly well.
The first line may be missing something for clarity - I was just (I don't think you don't mean fair as in justice?) Some lines are a bit choppy; it was hard (for me) to find the flow to your phrasing. A piece worth working on to polish it up a bit. I would agree with Robisms on the best line, you need to build on that maybe???
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Ken doll - I was just That's exactly what I meant. I was fair and innocent as I watched a corrupt injustice right in front of my face
Thank you for your much appreciated comments. I agree it is choppy but it has double meanings all throughout sending a message to the wrong doers.... thank you again for much appreciated commenting
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Robisms - Best line! "I just wanna see that smile when she dances". Love it.
on Jan 26 2020 10:29 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for commenting, I really like this one
on Jan 26 2020 11:33 AM PST x edit
Randall S. - very cool love the last three lines well done
on Jan 26 2020 10:08 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you I really enjoy reading your talented work
on Jan 26 2020 10:31 AM PST x edit
Randall S. - thank you, dear friend, I've been doing it a long time blessings to you
on Jan 26 2020 10:38 AM PST x edit
nashita - this was so amazing to read - thank you for sharing it with us <3
on Jan 26 2020 09:51 AM PST x edit
- Wow! Such imagery and deeply felt piece! Very powerful!
Amazing
on Jan 26 2020 09:32 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you much appreciated
on Jan 26 2020 09:33 AM PST x edit
Garic - Consistent use of metaphor.
on Jan 26 2020 09:31 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you garlic
on Jan 26 2020 09:40 AM PST x edit
Kepler 186f - beautiful imagery and well executed personification!.. very clever work ken!
on Jan 26 2020 09:31 AM PST x edit
Kepler 186f - it's nice to read this again.
on Feb 18 2020 06:58 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you appreciate the comments
on Jan 26 2020 09:31 AM PST x edit
- Cool Poem Isnt Sinning More FUN Anyway? HA HA HA
Holla!
Amazing
on Jan 20 2020 01:14 PM PST x edit
Ken doll - Lol no comment thank you
on Jan 20 2020 01:25 PM PST x edit
Heavenly Angel - Nicely written brevity! Thank you for sharing and for taking part in this! All the very best to you!
Heavenly
on Dec 29 2019 02:32 PM PST x edit
- ← I love the power of emotions and those strong lines here "So rake my dust over the coals and the rising ashes
Cause that's the kinda fuel it takes to set the world on fire".... amazing writing and such a rawness and great metaphor. Thank you for sharing another gifted poem of yours!
on Dec 21 2019 07:32 AM PST x edit
Ken doll - Thank you for taking the time to read and also comment
on Dec 21 2019 07:34 AM PST x edit